無論怎樣短語
【能力水平測試
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浙江省金麗衢十二校高三第一次聯考
閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節進行續寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。
Rebecca stretched her tired back。 “That’s the last seedling（種樹苗），Pa。 Have we planted enough？”
Pa walked to the end of the row of cottonwood seedlings。 “No，” he said。 “We have to plant trees all the way to that rock over there。 We’ll need about twenty more seedlings。”
“I’ll get the seedlings。” offered Rebecca。 She longed to cool her feet in the shallow river running through the cotton field。
“You’d better let me go， Miss Petticoats，” teased her twin brother， William。 “There are dangers all over this prairie（牧場/草原）
“You may both go，” said Pa。 “But hurry back。 I’d like to finish before sundown。”
They went across the shallow river to a sandbar where small cottonwood seedlings grew。
Gently， they pulled the seedlings from the sand。
“There！ That’s twenty， with a few to spare。” said Rebecca。
“OK，” said William。 He led the way to the riverbank， then stopped。 “Look！ There’s the dugout（防空壕）we lived in when we moved here last year。” He pointed to a hole in the grassy river bank。
“Come on， let’s go inside。”
“No，” Rebecca said， “Pa is waiting。 Besides， it’s hard telling what’s in there。”
“Then you start back。” said William， handing the seedlings to Rebecca。 I’ll catch up。” He ran to the dugout and stepped inside。
Rebecca tied the seedlings into her long apron（圍裙）and began to walk。 Suddenly she froze in her tracks。
A huge prairie rattlesnake（響尾蛇）moved along the river bank。
It stopped right in front of the dugout and lay still， coiled up on the warm sunny bank。
“William！” Rebecca shouted。 “Don’t come out！”
“Huh？” Williams face appeared at a tiny window beside the door of the dugout。
Rebecca pointed toward the rattler。 William‘s face paled when he saw the snake blocking the doorway。 He turned desperate eyes toward Rebecca， then he glanced behind himself。 Rebecca knew what he was thinking： “Were there more snakes waiting in the shadowy corners of the dugout？”
Rebecca’s mind raced， trying to think of a way to get William out of there。 An idea popped
into her head。 It was their only hope。 It was risky， but it was the only hope。
“Don’t move，” she said to William in a soft voice。 “When r say NOW， you run out of there as fast as you can。”
Rebecca removed the skirt-like petticoat（襯裙）from beneath her dress， then dipped it into the river。 She squeezed out some of the water， then climbed to the top of the bank， directly above the dugout’s opening。
注意：
1。所續寫短文的詞數應為150左右；
2。至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；
3。續寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語己為你寫好；
4。續寫完成後，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。
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“Get ready to run， William，” she said， keeping an eye on the motionless snake。
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Are you OK？he asked， breathing heavily。 Rebecca nodded。
劉凱老師答疑解惑：
語篇解讀
：
本文是一篇記敘文類個人故事。雙胞胎兄妹Rebecca（麗貝卡）和William（威廉）與爸爸一起種植樹苗，然後兩兄妹去取種苗，隨後，Rebecca發現一條響尾蛇在河岸邊爬動，於是大聲提醒被困於防空壕的William，並想出了合適的解救方法。
難句分析
：
原文They went across the shallow river to sandbar where small cottonwood seedlings grew。
翻譯：
他們跨過淺水河來到一個沙洲上，那是一個小棉白楊幼苗生長的地方。
分析
：
這是一個主從複合句。主句是they went across the shallow river to sandbar，後面是關係副詞 where引導的定語從句，修飾a sandbar。
劉凱老師
寫作指導
：
思路點撥
：
1。根據短文倒數第三段可知，William脫離危險的方法驚險刺激，但無論後續事件怎樣設計，都要注意過渡自然、合情合理。
2。設計後續事件結果一般要體現Rebecca和William兄妹的勇敢與聰明，要向好的方面發展。本文中的設計就可以體現面對困難勇於克服的價值取向。
3。充分體現自己的寫作水平，續寫過程中的一詞一句都是展示個人語言基本功的絕佳機會，因此在保持原作語言風格的基礎上，要充分調動已有生活經驗和知識遣詞造句，增強語言表現力。在敘述Rebecca向William大聲嚷叫的同時，又要言簡意賅地介紹William迅速做出反應的生動場面。
4。語言上也要使用一些過渡性詞語，並且合理使用一些比較高階的句式，以增加文章的文采。
審題分析：
見現場板書
學生
高分範文
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“Get ready to run， William，”she said，keeping an eye on the motionless snake。 Rebecca opened the dripping petticoat softly and gently，aimed at the snake and then dropped the petticoat on top of he rattlesnake with her hands trembling。 “NOW！she shouted to her twin brother，William when the snake began to move towards the dugout。William swiftly jumped over the covered snake and desperately ran towards his father， and meanwhile， Rebecca was following him。
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“Are you OK？” he asked，breathing heavily。 Rebecca nodded， She said happily，“Thankfully， we managed to escape safely。”They both had a rest for a while and calmed themselves down。 Rebecca examined whether the seedlings were still complete。 But unfortunately， she dropped two seedlings when shetogether with William was escaping。They raced back to the woods to find them“They are over there！” Rebecca shouted loudly， and then they picked them up and turned back to their father。Not far away， they saw their father resting on a big rock， because there were no seedlings。（157 words）
劉凱老師解析本文：
①動詞opened、aimed、dropped的使用恰到好處，with複合結構的運用更能突顯作者駕馭英語語言的能力。
②when引導的時間狀語從句的使用，能準確地描述響尾蛇反應的迅速。
③此處William突出敏捷的動作。
④happily以及thankfully、safely等詞揭示了Rebecca與William逃離的迅速與不易。
⑤本句很好地渲染了“調整心情準備繼續前行”的藝術感。
⑥But unfortunately的運用恰到好處，together with的使用更加突顯了作者駕馭英語語言的能力。
⑦shouted、picked up以及turned back to的使用，節奏緊湊、層次感強。
⑧because從句的使用，更能突出“父親”等待種樹苗而稍作休息的合理性。
標準範文
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“Get ready to run，William， ”she said，keeping an eye on the motionless snake。 Rebecca opened the dripping petticoat（wet through with water）as much as she could。 Her hands shook as she leaned over the bank。 With one swift movement， she dropped the heavy garment on top of the rattlesnake。“NOW！” she shouted to William as the snake began to move under the petticoat。 William jumped over the covered snake and ran fast before he stopped and turned around。 Rebecca was right behind him。
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“Are you OK？” he asked， breathing heavily。 Rebecca nodded。 She was glad they managed to escape。 It took them five minutes to catch their breath and calm themselves down。 Rebecca checked to make sure that the seedlings were still complete。Then William gave Rebecca a grateful hug。 “Thanks，sister。 I’d have done the same for you back there。” Rebecca said with a grin。 “You couldn’t have， for you don’t wear petticoats！” Laughing， they raced back to the woods。（160 words）
重要短語：
keep an eye on留意/照看
lean over the bank向河岸傾斜
on top of在……之上
be right behind sb。剛好在某人的背後
manage to escape設法逃脫
catch one’s breath喘口氣
calm oneself down使自己平靜下來
【能力水平測試
02
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A Gift of Gold
閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節進行續寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。
It was the winter of 1937， just after Christmas。The Depression was still going on， but I was in good spirits。I was going to graduate from elementary_school，_but my mother still dressed me in shorts。Most of my classmates had given up wearing shorts。For the graduation ceremony， all the boys were expected to dress white shirts and darkblue wool pants。
I waited until a week before I told my_mother。On a cold Monday afternoon I went home from school。
“Mom，” I said， “about graduation 。。。”
“Yes？” she answered。
“They are going to give me the firstprize medal，” I said。
Still working over the_stove，_she looked over her shoulder at me and smiled broadly。“That’s wonderful，Babe。Dad and I will both be there， and we‘ll be the proudest in the place。”
She must have seen by the look on my face that something was wrong。She turned her back and said，“ So？”
“So， I have to get long pants，” I said。
“Babe， we don’t have the money for new_pants right now，” she said。
“Okay，” I burst out。“Then I won‘t go to graduation。Plus， I’m running away from home！”
“If I were you， I wouldn‘t pack my bags。We’ll solve the pants problem somehow，” she said。
The following Saturday， when my mother said，“Let‘s go shopping，” I knew that she had solved the problem。Then we left home。We took_the_trolley and got off at Southern Boulevard， the best shopping street。Our clothing store was just a couple of blocks away。
But first we walked a short way down the Boulevard and stopped at a place I had never noticed before。
“Wait here，” she said。Then she opened the door with the hand with a gold_wedding_ring on her ring_finger and entered a storefront that looked like a bank。
She went out about ten minutes later with a purse in her left_hand，_and then we went to the pants store。 I chose a pair of pants。 After a patient bargain with the_seller，_my mother bought it at the price of three dollars and fifty cents and handed it to me。
注意：
1.所續寫短文的詞數應為150左右；
2．使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；
3．續寫部分分兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；
4．續寫完成後，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。
Paragraph 1：
Iwasholdingthepantstightlyundermyarmwhenmymotherwenttopaythemoney。
Paragraph 2：
Wetookthetrolleybackhome。
語篇解讀：
本文是一篇記敘文。“我”即將小學畢業，可母親還要“我”穿短褲，“我”堅持要穿長褲上臺領獎。母親給“我”買了新褲子，但她買褲子的錢的來源卻令“我”覺得慚愧，感動不已……
難句分析
原文：She must have seen by the look on my face that something was wrong。
譯文：她一定是透過我的面部表情看出哪兒不對勁。
分析：這是一個主從複合句。that something was wrong是由that引導的賓語從句。主句的謂語為must have seen，是情態動詞對過去事實的肯定推測的用法，由“must＋have＋過去分詞”構成。
寫作指導
審題分析：
1。文章屬於記敘文；
2。順應文章發展脈絡，必須以第三人稱的視角去體驗“我”與母親圍繞買長褲發生的故事；
3。以一般過去時為主，適時使用相應的過去時態；
4。後續事件須自然過渡、合情合理；
5。努力挖掘母親在為“我”買長褲過程中的主題昇華；
6。謳歌母親給予“我”的全身心的愛，讓讀者產生積極向上的共鳴。
思路點撥：
1。根據Paragraph1提示句I was holding the pants tightly under my arm when my mother went to pay the money。可分析，此段可以細緻刻畫媽媽付款的一舉一動，然後可以對媽媽錢的來源提出疑問，為下一段埋下伏筆。但無論後續事件怎樣設計，都要注意過渡自然、合情合理。
2。根據Paragraph2提示句We took the trolley back home。分析，此段著重介紹坐車過程以及回到家中的具體細節，也可以在此段中對錢的來源給出合理的解釋，昇華文章續寫的主題。設計後續事件要向好的方面發展，要有積極進取的價值取向。
3。充分體現自己的寫作水平，續寫過程中的一詞一句都是展示個人語言基本功的絕佳機會，因此在保持原作語言風格的基礎上，要充分調動已有的生活經驗和知識遣詞造句，增強語言表現力。
4。語言上，也要使用一些承上啟下的過渡性詞語，並且合理使用一些比較高階的句式，以增加文章的風采。
學生
高分範文
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I was holding the pants tightly under my arm when my mother went to pay the money。 As soon as I turned around， I saw her take a sum of money out of her purse in her left hand。 I didn’t know where my mom got all this money from。 Finally she handed this money for the pants to the seller，who immediately gave my mother the fifty cents‘ change。Mom smiled at me，and said， “Let’s go back， honey。”
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We took the trolley back home。 And the trolley was crowded with man people， so my mother and I were standing together all the time。 However， I even imagined walking up to the stage in my new pants to receive my medal， and I couldn‘t help laughing。 When we got home， my mother took out the key and wanted to open the door。 And at that moment， I noticed that the gold wedding ring on her ring finger my mother had always worn was missing。 Perhaps it was Mother who sold it， and I felt sad， lost in thought。（161 word）
①從屬連詞as soon as的使用，銜接自然、結構緊湊
②where引導的賓語從句，精準到位、運用自然。
③who引導的非限制性定語從句更清晰地刻畫了the seller接下來的具體動作和細節。
④電車的擁擠與“我們”站著，動感畫面躍然紙上。
⑤imagine的運用自然、流暢，而I couldn’t help doing的使用則流露出作者無比激動的心情。
⑥when引導的時間狀語從句，言簡意賅、貼切自然。
⑦that引導的賓語從句，精準到位，流暢自然；定語從句my mother had always worn使用得也恰到好處。
⑧it was。。。who構成的強調句，非常清晰地突出了“母親”用賣掉的戒指的錢購買的長褲，與前文形成呼應。
官方
參考範文：
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Iwasholdingthepantstightlyundermyarmwhenmymotherwenttopaythemoney。 I saw her take a tiny brown envelope from her purse，tear back the sealed flap and remove the contents。There were four brandnew onedollar bills inside。She carefully unfolded them and handed them to the_seller。The seller gave my mother the fifty cents’ change。How did she manage to get such a large sum of money？Maybe my parents found new jobs with higher salary。
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Wetookthetrolleybackhome。Sitting next to my mother on the_trolley，_I had the window seat and looked out for most of the ride。I even imagined Father had come home early and prepared a wonderful meal。About halfway home， I shifted around in my seat to face forward。I glanced down at my mother‘s hands folded across her purse， which was resting on her lap。 It was then that I saw the gold_wedding_ring that had always circled thering_finger on her left_hand was no longer there。（137 words）
高階短語：
take a tiny brown envelope from從……裡拿出一個褐色小信封
tear。。。open撕開
manage to do設法做……
a large sum of money一大筆錢
with higher salary較高的薪水
